Through discussions in the group, we have found that we like the elements of the scared little girl, a fog/smoke-monster nemesis, a dreamlike, etherical midway land. To keep it a serious and "deep", in relation to the first initial "Facing Death" concept.
Well thats one way of putting it. After a few hours of thinkin and dicussin in our "quiet" room at school, the following images represents the first draft of our story. Compiled, joined thoughts and ideas frow previous discussions, merge together in one, beautifull, orgy of heavenly poetic words of pure delight.
Yes, that is truly my opinion of our work. I think we did pretty damn good, time factor considered. ^^
The Jist of It.
Beginning:A little girl lies in her bed, severly, if not fatally ill.
A shadow pass over the window, as frost builds up on it.
Some mysterious fog starts drooping in through it.
Girl awakens, get scared by the spectacle, grabs her teddy and heads for the door.
Middle:
Arrives in a emty street.Fog builds up from a manhole, scary.
Girl looks around nervously.
Runs, escapes, see "somthing/one(?)" in the horizon.
Teddy get cought on something, first face-off with fog.
Gets the teddy, heads on toward "light" in horizon.
End:
Reaches light, fog following, now faster.
Fog catches up, gets a hold. Pulls her back from the lightsource
Returns to life. Back in the room.
"Fog" was really mom/dad.
The other things that was discussed was the use of certain effects and plot changes, like having the girls reflection fade out more and more as she progressed further in the film. And that the fog itself represented life, though beeing so scary at first. Maybe pushing it towards a choise for the girl, the mom/dad in life or her beloved grandma/pa in death.